Registered: March 10, 2005
Posts: 14
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Life is not peaches n cream
but that doesn't mean you should be making a scene
it's obscene
I know it may seem like my grass is green
But it's truly on fire while my clock was cleaned
You've got it bad but so Do I
so stop whining and open your eyes
You're not the only one at night who cries
the only independant in life who tries.
The only broken wing who struggles to fly
stop your whining,open your eyes----
just look where you're going and fly.
look where you're flying and try.
open your wings or die.
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Registered: March 10, 2005
Posts: 14
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this was written for my friend, who was crying and breaking down one day, but they're happy everyday, you do not need a long poem to express the way you feel. ...people always pick on him, it was written with him in mind, I am not writing this for myself ^^;
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Registered: May 03, 2003
Posts: 8901
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It sounds like a rap. I extremely dislike rap.
I like these calm little moments before the storm.
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Registered: April 15, 2003
Posts: 1397
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Patience is a virtue, and simple rhymes do not a poet make.
Those who profess to favor freedom and yet depreciate agitation are men who want crops without plowing up the ground, they want rain without thunder and lightning. They want the ocean without the roar of its many waters. Frederick Douglass
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Registered: November 05, 2004
Posts: 6058
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Just wait a while. Half an hour is not nearly long enough for people to discover your poem. I'm not much for poetry, but I guess yours would go in my "good" pile.
The more you know, the less you don't know.
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Registered: March 10, 2005
Posts: 14
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my thoughts must go unheard. I'm used to it...whatever ^^;; ...
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Registered: March 10, 2005
Posts: 14
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whaddya think?
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