Controlling World

The world is but one person
Thinking, dressing, smelling
Never changing
One person whose world would
Come to an end if not to
Look like a Barbie
A Barbie that criticizes and judges
To satisfy them selves by saying
There is someone worse
A world full of greed jealousy
Without a meaning



THIS IS ONE OF MY POEMS I DONT KNOW IF U GUYS WILL UNDERSTAND HOPE U DO!!!



As she sits there with her hands
on her legs looking away at the path she has made
With her wounds to lead the way She
follows the crimson red as it trickles down her legs
wondering when her time will come again
Welcoming death as the blood leads down between her legs
Expecting everything will go away…

I didn’t know how to finish it…

THIS IS ANOTHER BUT I GUESS WHAT I WANT IS TO KNOW WHAT U GUYS THINK OF THEM BAD OR GOOD THANX

THANX !!!!!!!!!!!!

i luv your poems that r awesome and i some what no what your talkin about and your an awesome writer

well i see that i have gotten remarks although some where rude and hatefull and maybe even truthfull its ok b/c weather u liked them or not it doesnt effect that i did this b/c its my life. but thanx to those who commented on this and yes even u risika2004

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its ok that u feel that way b/c u dont know me and well im use 2 hard headed ppl!
*~confussed~*

i understand the 2nd one...b/c i've cut b4 (not a pleasant thing to do). i hate that ppl will sit there and tell you to stop tho...cuz they dont know how hard it is. cuttin is like weed. once you do it once you wanna do it again. but i got over it with some help from friends and family.

CONFUSSED....i get the first poem.
like the second one is kinda confusing, but i THINK i get most of it.

'looking away at the path she has made' does that mean, she has made a mistake and she is watching the wrong path that she has chosen? then i got lost in the blood thing...

TTYL. bye bye

AMF, I have absolutely no problem being friends with you. I welcome it, you've always seemed cool.

It's been a rough week and I blame part of that on my attitude.

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Originally posted by risika2004:
Douche? Hm. That's kinda lame, hun.


And in case you didn't notice, that was sarcasm.

my last post was BLATENT sarcasm


I was countering your sarcastic remark with a sarcastic remark of my own...and i thought it would be obvious, generate some slight humor and cool down the argument so we could all be friends...but I suppose I overestimated you

Douche? Hm. That's kinda lame, hun.


And in case you didn't notice, that was sarcasm.

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Originally posted by risika2004:
Captain Intelligent.

finally some douche recognizes my rank

Heh, whatever you say Captain Intelligent.

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Originally posted by risika2004:
Ooooh my fucking god. I HATE YOU CONFUSSED!

Riska...you told me to grow up somewhere....hmm

I wont tell you to grow up because I dont quite wish the death of creativity and spark on anyone, and furthermore that staement is hackneyed and stupid....but i will tell you to bite me

Ooooh my fucking god. I HATE YOU CONFUSSED!

Awesome, khary.

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I didn’t know how to finish it…

Fucking delete it. Annihilate it. Eradicate it. Expunge any trace evidence of your little literary travesty.

I GUESS WHAT I THINK IS THAT IT WOULD BE BETTER FOR ALL PARTIES INVOLVED IF YOU JUST QUIT TRYING PLZKTHX I DONT KNOW IF U WILL UNDERSTAND HOPE U DO!!!

umm....all I can say about your poems is they need work. The first one..I am lost. The second one is kind of strong. You just need to add more emotional words and use stronger vocabulary to enhance the feelings of the poem.

If you're going to write a poem, make it original. Please.