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Picture of skyofautumn
Registered: April 28, 2005
Posts: 24
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Ok, so this is my first time actually posting my poetry. Just tell me what you think, I will be happy to hear anything and feel free to share any of yours with me.



In the pouring rain we dance
Together
Embraced in each others arms
My rain soaked face
If only you knew
It is not rain that soaks my face, but tears
We spin, holding each other tighter
People pass
Judging us, not knowing us
The moon lights our path
And the stars are our friends
Don’t ever let me go
I am afraid to be alone
You see a tear drop from my eye
But with your gentle hand you wipe it away
I look up at you and our eyes connect
Together and forever
We will be dancing in the rain


Just promise me, that you'll try to breathe.
Picture of LiangRome
Registered: March 02, 2005
Posts: 76
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Merely mediocre. Keep writing.

DJ


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Picture of ilovebush
Registered: March 10, 2005
Posts: 745
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thats really good. I cant write poetry to save my life so I commend anyone that can write. =)


"We have staked the whole of all our political institutions upon the capacity of mankind for self-government, upon the capacity of each and all of us to govern ourselves, to control ourselves, to sustain ourselves according to the Ten Commandments of God." - James Madison
Picture of iamastar
Registered: June 22, 2004
Posts: 2343
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That was good. Trust me, it is better than alot of my poetry. Keep it up and good luck with your poerty. Keep writing.


I have not yet reached my goal, and I am not perfect. But Christ has taken hold of me. So I keep on running and struggling to take hold of the prize. My friends, I don't feel that I have already arrived. But I forget what is behind, and I struggle for wha
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