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Registered: June 09, 2003
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Since ever-one else was posting poetry, I though I'd post a recent one of mine. Tell me what you think. Is Home--Is HomeHome-- Lands afar, Where music stirrs the heart, And smiles, Joys Laughter-- Are a merry start It's where the bed Be warm at night, And bright be all the stars, And white branches In the wind, Snow melding with the bark-- But e'er green Is home, is home, Where the flutes sing merry song, Welcoming the traveler Who's been absent for so long
None of us can ever be free while others are still in chains. -Leslie Feinberg
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Registered: December 11, 2004
Posts: 35
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If it means something to you..and has meaning to your life...(or others.) then it's everything a poem could/can ever be. -Katz
~In my experience people who feel as if they aren't special have more to contribute. Feelings of frustration and doubt and the will to overcome these feelings make you stronger than you could possibility believe~
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Registered: July 26, 2004
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The idea is good. Work on the wording and fluency.
Evitere Les Contrefacons.
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Registered: April 03, 2004
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Maybe we do go to a place like that when we die, unless of course we go to hell.
The man who smiles when things go wrong has thought of someone to blame it on. - Robert Bloch
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Registered: August 15, 2004
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I love the imagery... I'd like to think that people go to a place like that when they die.
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Registered: August 17, 2001
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I thought the same thing, DWM.
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Registered: June 09, 2003
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Well thanks. I thought for a moment you were Jamaica, and wondered why she of all people would be giving me a compliment.
None of us can ever be free while others are still in chains. -Leslie Feinberg
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Registered: August 14, 2003
Posts: 64
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Your poem is beautiful. I loved it. Thank you for taking the plunge 
Hope, Pray, Dream, Live, For the one day that you have been given
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Registered: June 09, 2003
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I dunno. I don't think you'll figure out which one it was, I don't remember.
None of us can ever be free while others are still in chains. -Leslie Feinberg
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Registered: December 11, 2003
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Was it a newer or an older song? Meh, I know, I love Enya.
"Regardless, I have always, and will always, succeed."
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Registered: June 09, 2003
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Don't remember. It's one of em, though. One of the ones with no words.. I can't write with people talking or singing.
None of us can ever be free while others are still in chains. -Leslie Feinberg
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Registered: December 11, 2003
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Which song? Yeah, her music is enlightening.
"Regardless, I have always, and will always, succeed."
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Registered: June 09, 2003
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I wrote it while listening to an Enya song. Her music is really neat.
None of us can ever be free while others are still in chains. -Leslie Feinberg
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Registered: February 18, 2004
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i like the poem....wish i knew a place like that. *shrugs* good job though.
Hope for the best and expect the worst............take whatever life throws at you...
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Registered: December 11, 2003
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I like it because my current situation makes me relate to it. So, I understand it.
"Regardless, I have always, and will always, succeed."
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Registered: June 09, 2003
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I like it. It has a somber tone to it.
None of us can ever be free while others are still in chains. -Leslie Feinberg
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Registered: August 14, 2003
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DWM, you do a really good job. Very good spatial order and the descriptions are cool.
Short and sweet.
Life is a long lesson in humility. -James M. Barrie; "Are you terrorizing babies again...!?" -Some lady I heard
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