okay, so here is a poem i just thought up.
can you guess what its about???!?!?!?!?

okay ,so here it goes::

I see a fish,
That catches my eye,
For it is struggling,
To get out of a plastic bag,
That has invaded the fish’s water,
The fish begins to rock back and forth,
Violently to get away from this catastrophe,
Making it even harder to breathe,
Using all its might to break itself free,
All of the sudden the fish stops,
It becomes still as can be,
The fish is dead,
And it didn’t have to be,
If only people understood,
That little things like this,
And even more horrible things,
Happen because of us,
And that shouldn’t be.



(oh by the way , not all of it is supposed to ryhme!!)

its preatty good but if it doesn't rhyme then you have to get it to flow. ^_^

thats amazing becuase its excactly what ive been thinking about lately. are these little things part of gods plan? is it really okay for us to belive that the eaarth was created for us? did god really make us above everthing else? this poem is really good. i would love tips and ideas for peoms as i love to write them but im not very good.

okay! thanks for the tips!!
i will definatly check that poem out whenever i get a chance!

The first thing you need to do is re-evaluate the punctuation as there should be some periods in there instead of commas.

Also, try reading it aloud to work on the flow and word choice a bit.

There's a poem you may be interested in looking up. It's called "The Fish" and it's by Elizabeth Bishop. Your poem kind of reminds me of it.