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Registered: October 25, 2004
Posts: 95
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Engulfed By lonlieness and sorrow. Drowning in my own tears. All alone, no one to save me. no one to save me from my greatest adversary, My warden, My captor, My attacker, No one to Save me from myself. Lost in my mind, engulfed by my empty shallow state. Digging my own Grave. Rembering what can never be. Alone.
"I Am A Soilder, I Fight Where I'm Told & I Win Where I Fight." - General George S. Patton
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Registered: June 22, 2004
Posts: 2345
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That was honestly good. It was better than I expected.
I have not yet reached my goal, and I am not perfect. But Christ has taken hold of me. So I keep on running and struggling to take hold of the prize. My friends, I don't feel that I have already arrived. But I forget what is behind, and I struggle for wha
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Registered: September 22, 2004
Posts: 889
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Skippy, it honestly doesn't suck. Don't think like that.
"Take risks and never regret them."
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Registered: October 25, 2004
Posts: 95
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I SWEAR I'M GONNA DESTROY MY COMPUTER FOR DOUBLING UP AND TELLING ME THERES AN ERROR BUT POSTING MY MESSAGE!DOES THIS EVER HAPPEN TO ANY OF YOU?
"I Am A Soilder, I Fight Where I'm Told & I Win Where I Fight." - General George S. Patton
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Registered: October 25, 2004
Posts: 95
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I kinda figured that it really blowed but I'm boerd and depressed. and when I'm like that I write poetry
"I Am A Soilder, I Fight Where I'm Told & I Win Where I Fight." - General George S. Patton
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Registered: October 25, 2004
Posts: 95
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yeah i kindafigured it did i was just boerd
"I Am A Soilder, I Fight Where I'm Told & I Win Where I Fight." - General George S. Patton
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Registered: April 15, 2003
Posts: 1397
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quote: Yeah of course I did why does it suck?
Why yes, yes it does.
Those who profess to favor freedom and yet depreciate agitation are men who want crops without plowing up the ground, they want rain without thunder and lightning. They want the ocean without the roar of its many waters. Frederick Douglass
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Registered: September 22, 2004
Posts: 889
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Yeah, put "digging my own grave" alone on the next line. And also I don't know what you think of this, but when I write poems like that I usually write in all lowercase letters just to show inferiority, or the feeling of being small or meaningless.
"Take risks and never regret them."
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Registered: August 17, 2001
Posts: 5812
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I think the part 'Digging my own grave' should go on the next line. It just feels like it should. Or it works on that line to. I think it all just depends on when you read it.
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Registered: October 25, 2004
Posts: 95
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quote: Originally posted by VeRtiCaLxLiMiT: Did you write that?
Yeah of course I did why does it suck?
"I Am A Soilder, I Fight Where I'm Told & I Win Where I Fight." - General George S. Patton
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Registered: September 22, 2004
Posts: 889
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Did you write that?
"Take risks and never regret them."
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