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Picture of Yankeechicksrock
Registered: December 05, 2004
Posts: 1
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I feel lost in this world
Like it's not where i belong
Like home is so far away
I'll never return
But then sometimes
I feel like I'm so close
To the return


People who try to act like someone they're not are strange, not people who act like themselves
Registered: June 28, 2003
Posts: 2745
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i love this poem! It reminds me of being confused for a while and then after a few minutes, i would return to normal and then i would speak out what is really on my mind.
Picture of bella123
Registered: July 26, 2004
Posts: 2891
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yeah, good idea.


Evitere Les Contrefacons.
Picture of DopeySoph
Registered: November 21, 2004
Posts: 14
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i think it's good i would like to see what else you have got.


Live life to the full cos you never no when it's gonna end...
Picture of bella123
Registered: July 26, 2004
Posts: 2891
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It's a good start, but try working more on the rythem and context. keep working!Wink


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Picture of Karategirl28
Registered: February 18, 2004
Posts: 3177
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wow, story of my life. I like it, this is really deep. keep it up i guess.
laters~

Ps welcome Smile


Hope for the best and expect the worst............take whatever life throws at you...
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