Feelings, Emotion;
Liberal fuel.
Hard work, Rationale;
Conservative gruel.

Success, esteem;
Liberals bain.
irrational conclusions;
conservatives refrain.

Happiness, tradition;
a liberal irate.
Happiness, tradition;
conservatives elate.

Thanks, Worth. When I wrote it, it did just all come out. I just know its not my best work and that bugs me. Anyways, its in the past, so we'll forget about it.

*sigh*

I am proud to call you a collegue and fellow artiste.

Consider it done my old friend. Only under one condition, Joey Dauben shall have no say in what you write.

Wait, my arms are shaking, I have but one more...

Impeachment
Impeachemnt
Impeachement
Gorw up
Your a baby
Your mom doesn't care
You never made the football team
You work for people liek me
I have friends you dont
People take my pciture
I have horse that cost more than your house
People in Thailand bow to my father
We call you people jerks, because you are
How does this make you feel you jerks?

Notsojoey, I would be honored if you were to allow me to write the forward to your book of poems.

Yet again my collegues

Sadness
Tears Tears Tears
Tears lead to years
The hour glass is full
The hour glass is empty
Are you still my friend old friend?
Smile, Grin, Laugh, Applause
I deserve every ounce of respect from you jerks

I am on a roll, I think I have one more in me old friends...

Spin
The records spin
Tear drops fall
Black si blue
Blue is black
Black is red
Yellow is yellow
Everything si spinning
Black is still blue
Star light
Star birht
Star dead
Comet
Radar goes black
Black is still blue
Quid
Whatever happened to the pence piece my friends?
Pirates sail the sea
Wealth to be taken
Poorness to be shared
Latin tongues are still beautiful to me.
Ball
Ball
Ball
Ball
Ball
Ball
Ball
Balls for the playing field
Ball
Ball
Ball
Strobe

Yellow shadows on my wall,
hell.
Why does the man talk with such disdain?
I have allowed myself love,
but death shows me the sea.
I can see the eye, the one eye.
Does it speak to you?
Frown.

quote:

My emotions are escaping through my tears like a dam has just broken letting the contents of my heart flow free. Thank you for that inspiration notsojoey.

Brilliant. Another fine piece to add to our collection.

Yet again, I have been inspired to pick up the pen and dip it in ink...

FLASH!!!!!!!
Television shows me colors
Yet I am color blind
Ethics, accountability, integrity?
I wish so.
But I dissapoitned.
The trains keep rolling.

My emotions are escaping through my tears like a dam has just broken letting the contents of my heart flow free. Thank you for that inspiration notsojoey.

My favorite part is "Monorail?"

Bam
Boom
The caboose is running empty
Monorail?
Kaboom

Animals running.
Where will they go?
Pieces of you, pieces of love.
(Darkenss)
Black smoke.

Bushsupporter, here is some honest feedback.

Your poem's have been perfect both literaly and philosphicaly.

I ask you once again, have you ever considered composing a compolation of your poems to distribute to third world countries as a beacon of hope?

Is there a muesam for original poems? If so I will surely see your first edition works there.

Keep up the good work and don't stop being true to yourself. It is obvious you have the intellectual ability to turn negative events in your life into poetry that is enjoyable by both the working class and the ivory tower.

Your poem is very good, greenleaf.

Perhaps the only thing wrong is that you tried too hard? When I write poetry, I just kinda write it. I don't do too much thinking about it. It seems to work better that way...

But there's nothing wrong that I can tell from it. I like it!

Here's a short one,

Soultorn

please ton't tear me apart
like a poor rag doll,
ever smiling at the world
and you,
as you rip her poor button eyes out

Deep, bs, deep...

I know you always don't get feedback, but I could use some help on the one I posted below. I know there's something wrong with it, and I like certain sections, but others just sound dumb. Could one of y'all read through it and tell me? I'm never happy with my work. I'll never be done with a poem because I'll just keep thinking there's something wrong with it. Geez, I sound so formal.

Wavemaster: You're back. Maybe you'll have a poem later.

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Originally posted by Greenleaf771:
Worth, I love it. Short, but the rythm and subject is very interesting. You've saved me from joey and BS's (hahahaha) mindless banter.

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Originally posted by Karategirl28:
I like your poem Worth.

Thanks, guys! Hearts to you.

If you click back you'll find two more that I like better called "Algebra (Eavesdropping)" and "Love is Immortal." The latter is my personal fave.

Click here for more stuff I've written.

I don't have a poem right now? Ack!