They remind me of Jamaica.

They give me bad memories....

-Sunset

Don't you roll your eyes at me! lol

-Sunset

Not a problem. It's just the truth

Aww, Thank you Ohio.
-Sunset

Ya know, I don't really care about what others thing of my poetry or if its good. I write exactly what my heart is telling me too. And if it's too simple then it is. Sun, your good. I haven't disliked one poem by you yet.

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nice job suncet. it's my favorite one of yours so far, but i was wondering, do you have any poems that arn't focused on other people? any based on yourself or on nature or any that aren't so dark?

Some. I write a lot of 'dark' poetry. I have a tid-bit on nature. And some on myself.
-Sunset

I enjoyed that poem immensely Sunset, good job.

nice job suncet. it's my favorite one of yours so far, but i was wondering, do you have any poems that arn't focused on other people? any based on yourself or on nature or any that aren't so dark?

Thanks.

I'm trying to write another one, about spring. But it isn't going too well.
-Sunset

Thats good sun

You can ***** about my poems all of you want, but it won't stop me from writing.

Trying to save you from your destruction.
Like a ticking bomb
Going off any minute.
Your life can wash away
Wash away like a powerful wave.
Diving deep
Drowning in your own blood
Such a crimson red
Swallowing you away
Suffocating you
The red so deep
I offered you my hand
Brushing it away
It was such a horrible disease
Dying in your own blood
Cutting at your own veins.
Just like a little kid
And a paper doll.
Cutting open your heart
Bleeding away your soul.
It's in your nature to destroy yourself
-For Jackie
-Sunset

I am too late for the argument.

Very good poem WaveMaster.

justsosweet, you've got to be one of the dumbest people i've ever known. we arn't mad that you criticized wavemaster's poem. we're mad that you did it in a mean way and that the comments were retarded. you actually said "What's going on here? The sunlight took hold of your sleeve and made your heart cold? A bit confused...please explain." wow, you just insulted him because you couldn't understand his metaphor. who's the one who doesn't understand poetry? cuz if you can't understand a basic metaphor then you have no room to talk. and this is just one example of all the stupid things you said. i don't even care if you're the same person as dieingrose. just stop being an ignorant fool.

and does anyone know why my previous post was randomly deleted? anyway wavemaster, why didn't you say something about the DWM thing earlier? in any case i absolutely loved your poems and i'm sure anyone who has even a basic understanding of metaphors will too.

I say common facts to be a smart ***. I do believe that I am not an intelligent being on this planet. I have never said I was another Einstein.

I'm not good at poetry, at all. I write more paragraph and story-base pieces. I'm good at that. (Or so I believe)

I do not claim to be some great writer.

I write 'poetry' for ranting, venting purposes. Not to have them be idiolized by people.

I do have countless people tell me I'm 'good', I do not know if they're telling the truth or not. I try to write pieces that some people can relate too, and I do that by writing simple lines, stanzas (sp?),ect.
-Sunset

JUSTSOSWEET:
Are you dyingrose or something? ya both have the same avatar, and you defend her like she's your own kin. I don't like mushy compliments. I like criticizm, but please don't ignore me when I say there is a fine line between constructive criticizm and tearing someone down. Instead telling sunset her poems are too simple and whatnot, you could tell her (in nice ways, please), how to correct that problem.
Evidence:

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Oh, and 'Sweet' and Rose. I would like to point out that there is a difference between being cruel and giving feedback

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Well you are wrong just like you are wrong about all "non-professionals" having "SIMPLE" poems.

I do agree with you there. Hell, look at my poems. Not even you could understand them. Does having poetry published make me a professional poet? Oh yeah! I's pro-fess-ee-on-ale! I's pro-fess-ee-on-ale!

Your poem had mediocre (sp?) descriptions. Where's the suppressing light? Where's the dirt between your fingers? Where's the fading breese? Where are the beautiful flowers of your mind, the story to the words? Where are you besides the garden?

We defend Sunset because she's earned our respect. How has dyingrose earned yours? Newbies, both of ya; you know nothing of each other. Earn our respect and perhaps respect shall be given. You know nothing about us or our history we've shared on these boards. Do you ignore every comment if only to shoot out poisonous barbs? You are a bard without a lyre, a poet without a scenery, a scribe without a pen. You're lacking something, the something that gives you others' respect.

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1.) Same avatar.
2.) People started to complain about you, giving you a reason to create an alternative name.
3.) Both 17 yr old females.
4.) Came to one's defensive.
5.) Write the same things (basically)

The Game

Tears,
Falling, rushing, streaming
Clouded eyes beneath clouded skies
Never to know peace again
Sobs echo in the night
Louder and louder until
All the world hears your cries
And knows your secrets as they all will die
The moon shines down in melencholy
As her tears they fill the sky
Mixed with the blood of the lost
And the memories of the slain
You laugh above the battle-field
Life is just a game

Hey, Sweet, what'ya think of that? Seriously?

This is just a stupid argument. Im done here. Ignorance does not deserve attention.

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Originally posted by Ohiosweetgirl:

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..no offense. What you said is common sense.

Yes and you were quite lacking of it to say such an ignorant thing. You talk so much of her poetry being simple, but she never claimed to be pro and she obviously has more talent then you or else you would try to write something. So obviously poetry isn't that simple!

Which ignorant thing? I never she was a pro. I never said I was more talented than her. And I never said I never try to write something. I do not see your point in this argument except for: you get an A for effort Sunset.