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Picture of Futility101
Registered: July 07, 2003
Posts: 738
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This one came to me at around 2:37 in the morning one sunday. It doesn't really have much of a structure, but I'd like to know what yall think.

Love?
By Andrew Moursund

Where is my heaven? Where is my cloud nine?
My soul seems so leaden, your motives serpentine
No novels, no movies, no sentimental notions
I have only my prison, treachery, and you
My warden, my keeper
This sinking feeling will not lift me up
Serve me hate on my plate, and regret in my cup
What is it that makes me suffer?
Night and day, it's taking pieces away
I hate you so damn much,
But you're so ****ing soft to the touch
My vile, beautiful queen,
Making lust betray my trust
Whether to live or to love, I couldn't say which
Till death do we part, you sadistic *****


-Antiquis temporibus, nati tibi similes in rupibus ventosissimis exponebantur ad necem! Caesar si viveret, ad remum dareris!
Picture of punkz13
Registered: March 24, 2005
Posts: 194
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nice...i love the rhyming.


undermine thier authority, reject thir moral standards, make anarchy & disorder your trademarks. cause chaos & disruption but don't let them take you ALIVE! -sid vicious
Picture of CrazyChild
Registered: October 05, 2003
Posts: 607
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*tear*, such beautiful poetry you have there.


do what you want
Picture of Banshee
Registered: March 19, 2003
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oh tingles down the spine that was beautiful


That might not make any sense but right now I'm too tired to explain it to you or to care .......
Picture of iamastar
Registered: June 22, 2004
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I agree with Jenos. I like your poem. You are an exceptional writer.


I have not yet reached my goal, and I am not perfect. But Christ has taken hold of me. So I keep on running and struggling to take hold of the prize. My friends, I don't feel that I have already arrived. But I forget what is behind, and I struggle for wha
Picture of Jenos
Registered: May 03, 2003
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I like your name. Moursund. And it was a good poem too.


I like these calm little moments before the storm.
Picture of specialcowz
Registered: March 13, 2005
Posts: 20
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thats really good i rite myself if u want to read sum of mine just reply...im sreious i really like it
me


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