As the moonlight shined upon her beautiful hair,
And the boy she had loved stood at her presence
She regretted the first time she layed eyes on him, And the first kiss they ever had, She regretted every smile and laugh they had ever shared, because now she stood alone, And even though he stood right in front of her, looking into her eyes, she didnt care and didnt bother to speak, she just rolled her eyes and looked away, to make him feel invisible and that nobody cared because this girl was in love and she was just scared

quote:

Please don't hate me!

I don't hate you.

I extremely dislike you.

Really, really, sorry, I take back my critical remarks to the other boarders. I disn't see that one post. But I still like the "meaningless paragraph." Cheers!

Gosh! It may just be a poem about a boy and a girl, but don't you feel that often the only way to get something off your chest is to write about it? I'm not trying to be mean or a stupid "Newbie" like you called Liang or anything, but that's just my opinion. Much of my work comes from pent-up anger, longing, or sadness and I think wall2000 was probably trying to express her/his or someone else's love and emotions. That's all. Please don't hate me! Cheers!

Wow, this is funny. After this post here, I went to read iamastar's profile.

"My philosophy: If you don't have anything nice to say don't say anthing at all."

How coincidental. At least you like Daniel Bedingfield. Thumbs up!

Okay may be its not just a first post . Sorry .

no. i absolutely agree with what the people here are saying, what i wrote was not poetry but it was more like feelings turned into a meaningless paragraph. i was just writing this off the top of my head just to get my last emotion out about this person, i apoligize if you really are bothered by it, i wrote this for myself not for any of you guys. i will be posting poetry though, and then you guys can critisize all you want, but not on my feelings, because feelings cant really be critisized

I hate to say this but look at the title of this forum. "YOUR PIECE OF MIND" Do realize that some of these posters are just trying to vent emotions. If you do not want to read it, don't. If you don't like it, don't reply. Don't like this "boy, girl, angst" style? Start your own poetry group. This forum is for people to express their feelings. You don't own the forum; you don't have the authority to edit their freedom of speech (ok, you mods do but . . .). Either way, don't sit here patronizing others just because you think their feelings are insignificant. Keep in mind the point of such a forum. The old adage says it quite well: "If you don't have anything nice to say, don't say anything at all." ::sighs::

was that a poem by the way ?

yeah..... Gee you know i was under the impression that there were other things to write about. and that this topic had died long ago. Guess i was misinformed

quote:

It's just another useless poem about a boy and a girl

i agree

Your point is what? It's just another useless poem about a boy and a girl. Stop it, I say, stop it.

Its a first post . Period .

That, is not poetry. That, is another self-ridden, obsessive relationship in the middle of a black hole poem.

Is this supposed to be a poem or is it just a rambling barrage of blank thoughts from yet another angst-ridden teen?