[COLOR:RED]Face the Sun

The nightmare was awoken again,
the screaming and yelling had begun.
The girl sighed,
as one screamer cried.

Then they turned
and let her feel the burn
Why did they hate her so

When they say the last line doesn't rhyme, just tell them that its to draw attention to the last line or to make it funnier. Just say that you did it on purpose.

Sometimes I just get a ramdon line popping into my brain, and then a couple others. Sometimes they're dumb or silly, and sometimes they're more frivilous. Here's two silly/dumb ones I've written:

Open up wide,
And with a look inside,
We will see,
That you've swallowed...
A BEE?!


There once was a foolish old fellow,
Who ate nothing but stale jell-o
His belly always lurched,
So by the toilet he perched,
In case he had to throw up there.

People always tell me "but the last line doesn't ryhme," so I'm just preventing that by saying I know, and it's still got the rythmm, so it works.

Ok im new hear and im bored/depressed/mad/sad ect... and a wrote a poem last night cuz i could sleep and i kept think about my boo and what's going to happen when i leave so hear it goes...

Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear.

Love...Just one of the hardest things in life. When you knokw she's at home crying her eyes out over you as you drive away not being able to change whats happening and how fast it happened... you know she's at home thinkinghow long will it be before you see each other again? And you don't even have an answer.while you sit there thinking what if you find someone else? What if she finds someone else to replace your spot? Love...Just one of the hardest thingsd to walk away from. When you know that you both are thinking when you find one another later on down the road that you don't want to hear the four letter word as they and answer the door "She's just a friend..." as you see someone walk up behind the person you were once in love with and now they have someone to replace your spot. Love...Just one of the hardest things to deal with in lif because one way or another one of you or both of you will end up getting hurt in the end.

Wow your poems are awesome. Destroyed is really great. please read mine!

i love the second one, "Destroyed". I love the way you wrote it. Great work!

its just the story of my life, not really any meaning, just a day in my old life.

I'm not really sure I grasp the meaning of it though.

Thanks fenvy.

I like the first one, Karate.

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Originally posted by Karategirl28:
Face the Sun

The nightmare was awoken again,
the screaming and yelling had begun.
The girl sighed,
as one screamer cried.

Then they turned
and let her feel the burn
Why did they hate her so?
The felt that she should know.

She wanted to yell back,
but she would just be smacked.
She thought, Was this reality?
Or just the horrors of her fantasies?

She went outside, under the trees,
To watch the sunset and be free.
She fell asleep to this scenary
and watched the sunrise in her fantasies.

....my old life, it's was one of my first poems, was written a few years ago.

Destroyed

The thing that destroys me the most
Is waking up every morning.
I used to wake up in a happy place,
Then it faded away.

I am not home anymore,
This place will never be home.
Something will always be missing,
But if I go back, it isn't there.
Whatever it was, it's gone.
My happy place was destroyed.
Everything is falling apart,
I don't care anymore.

My world is falling apart,
And I am at the sidlines, laughing,
I get pushed over the edge again.
I didn't get up this time.

Then I get out of bed,
Get prepared for the day,
Put on a smile,
And I am on my way.

....ummm wrote this one today, was really bored.


Comments and criticism welcome.

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ok here they are blah i hate technology.

Blah my computer is being dumb and tried to post this again. It won't let me put the URL code so just check for my other post. if you want to read my poetry.

Sorry for the mistake everyone.