
Registered: March 25, 2005
Posts: 17
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It's Funny How.....
its funny how hello is always accompanied with goodbye. its funny how good memories can start to make you cry. its funny how forever never seems to really last. its funny how much you'd lose if you forgot about your past. its funny how friends can just leave you when you're down. its funny how when you need someone they're never around. its funny how many lies can be packed into one "love letter". its funny how people forgive, even though they can't forget. its funny how one night can be packed with so much regret. its funny how ironic life turns out to be. but the funniest part of all is none of that is funny to me.
i don't know about y'all, but i love life.Even though it can sometimes let you down. you can't change it. you just have to figure it out as you go along...
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Registered: October 30, 2005
Posts: 43
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Wow, that is a really good poem! it's amusing, very!
We are the one making the path from life to death SHORTER.....
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Registered: August 10, 2005
Posts: 64
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I enjoyed it. you are very talented but Jenos it right, it could use a bit of work on the rhyme.
All It Took Was A Knife And A Desperate Heart.....
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Registered: May 03, 2003
Posts: 8902
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It needs a little work, but for the most part, I like it. Which is unusual. Usually I don't like these kind of poems, but even though this one is simple, I enjoyed reading it. The rhyme scheme needs some tweaking, but is good. Did you spend a lot of time on this? I think the ending was my favorite. Anyone else reading this, I'm in the mood to actually be nice to some newbies. Gasp, the horror. Tinker, in the future, post your poems here: http://boards.youthnoise.com/eve/forums/a/tpc/f/63510584663/m/57410863763
I like these calm little moments before the storm.
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