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Picture of LiangRome
Registered: March 02, 2005
Posts: 76
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Here is a new style of poetry:

The leaf in spring is green
luscious and ripe are the fruit it bears
a merry boy dances in the distance
to the humming of the bees

A grey cloud tiptoes over
sprinkles her magic powder
and a brilliance fills the tree
the boy runs under the tree, finding shelter

Lazy dogs lie by the tree
while the boy looks for exciting bugs
the cloud is gone and the sun laughs
the dog lifts his ear, attentive

A hollow voice echoes, the mother calling
the boy pays no mind to the silly woman
fields of fun are gracing my presence
lunch is of no concern . . .

The dog looks into the puddle
his right eye obstructed by a leaf
he licks the water, sending ripples aside
the boy dances in the leaves, to a small gust

Snoozing, the boy and dog lie
a familiar cloud waves lovingly
behind him is a menacing shadow
with a high pressure system in tow

The former cloud tightens his belt sucks in air; and blows
the protection of the tree is all the boy has left
lightning is abound and the boy cannot escape
a stray bullet of light strikes the tree

A guilty cloud ponders his actions
a dead, lost dog licks a dead boy under a dead tree
the cloud is dissipated
by an implosive conscience

Thanks for reading.

DJ


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Picture of LiangRome
Registered: March 02, 2005
Posts: 76
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I'd post more of my poetry here, but this forum is basically dead. (With the exception of 10 people maybe)


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Picture of faerienite
Registered: August 20, 2003
Posts: 1689
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Really good! The second to last stanza was slightly confusing (in an ununiform manner with the rest of the poem), but other than that it was witty and enjoyable. Smile


The most beautiful thing we can experience is the mystical. It is the source of all true art and science. --Albert Einstein
Picture of csichick1990
Registered: November 08, 2004
Posts: 3
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COOL!


Dum spiro, spero. While I breathe, I hope.
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